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Thursday, June 14, 2007

Thursday Thirteen




Thirteen First lines

Someone did this a while back and I've been meaning to, so let's see what I can come up with. The only drawback that I can see is that we only have 13 to work with. I'm going to use the raw and unedited WIP of my current story, Dark Redemption. If I flub up feel free to point out the oo-boos.



1. Sweat formed on her brow as pain lanced through her body, gripping, tearing, hot and steely.

2. Joaquin stopped jogging, feeling the air that had been coursing in and out of his lungs with ease suddenly lodge inside of him with a swiftness that caught him by surprise.

3. The house felt quieter with only five of them staying there now.

4. Silence in the little cabin seemed to stretch like a band, growing taut, raking her nerves until she was practically standing on her toes with needing to know what was going on out there.

5. Lily watched their faces.

6. Joaquin had awakened the second the sun had ceased to color the horizon.

7. The air crackled in the small cabin.

8. Lily watched the hallway, waiting for the to sun move with an anticipation that bordered on dread.

9. Joaquin raced northward with hundreds of miles already behind him, his thoughts as dark as the night sky surrounding him.

10. She moaned.

11. “Oh God! Don’t drop me!”

12. “Was he for real?” she gasped, stunned and shaken, holding her teeth tight to not chatter.

13. Ron meticulously placed the phone in its base, his calm movements belying the seething rage building inside of him at this latest report from his field ops.


Okay, so that's all of them, for this segment of "let's abuse the WIP one more time".


The purpose of the meme is to get to know everyone who participates a little bit better every Thursday. Visiting fellow Thirteeners is encouraged! If you participate, leave the link to your Thirteen in others comments. It’s easy, and fun! Be sure to update your Thirteen with links that are left for you, as well! I will link to everyone who participates and leaves a link to their 13 things. Trackbacks, pings, comment links accepted!



18 comments:

Cassandra said...

My favorite line?

“Oh God! Don’t drop me!”

And only because well, ya know – he did! LOL

Happy Thursday, chica!

Janie Hickok Siess, Esq. said...

Cute idea.

My list is posted, too.

R.G. ALEXANDER said...

Great idea! Great list too :)

Babe King said...

I like no 11 best. lol :-)

Gina Ardito said...

I love #11! So...when does it hit the shelves?

Adelle said...

Good Stuff, Diana! My list is up 2:)

Bernadette Gardner and Jennifer Colgan said...

I'm with Cassandra, LOL! Great list.

Jennifer McK said...

I love "Oh my God! Don't drop me!"
too.

Great job, Diana.

Jennifer Shirk said...

#11 IS funny--but I kind of liked #4 for the description, too.

Great list all around! :)

Diana Castilleja said...

Hehe, I get the giggles too at #11.

Thanks the compliments guys! :)

Robin L. Rotham said...

LOL! Who can't relate to "Oh God! Don't drop me!" ?

Ava Rose Johnson said...

I love no. 11, it creates so many funny images

Rhonda Stapleton said...

Great list! I love reading lines... :D

Paige Tyler said...

Great list!

*hugs*
Paige

Heather said...

Love the “Oh God! Don’t drop me!”
one! LOL

Elle Fredrix said...

Great list. Now when do we get to read the whole thing?

Lyric said...

Oh..I loved the last one. Good list.

Debbie Mumford said...

Oooo ... I love snippets of WIP! Thanks for sharing!